Objects Are Closer Than They Appear


Over at dVerse, the prompt was to go to your favorite window, door or outside view and snap a photo, then take said photo and write a poem about it. This is a picture from a couple of days ago that I put a few words to...



Objects are closer than they appear,

taunting with menace and spate,

especially the ones instilling fear,

gaining speed as you try to escape.



Taunting with menace and spate,

grey shadows swallow the sun,

gaining speed as you try to escape,

torrents of sorrow soon to come.



Grey shadows swallow the sun,

especially the ones instilling fear,

torrents of sorrow soon to come,

objects are closer than they appear.





© 2014 abruvanamedsly



15 comments:

  1. that has a rather haunting feel... the things we see in the rearview..how they approach sometimes quickly....there's one hope though... get your foot on the gas pedal and drive faster than the clouds that try to swallow you... it's worth trying.. and this comes from the land of sebastian vettel..of course..smiles

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  2. ha. you'll never outrun that which is following you...fun play off the mirror...being followed can def feel menacing....sorrow will always find us, but we dont have to wallow in it...

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  3. As Satchel Paige said, "Don't look back. Something might be gaining on you."

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  4. Oh this is a really sinister one... reminds me of a cartoon... showing just a big eye, and the text objects are closer than they appear... hmmm that would be something..

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    1. It's a pantoum...I guess you could call it villanelle's little cousin :-)

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  6. I enjoyed reading this poem. Its eerie words suggest a lot of meanings, and also like the image used.

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  7. Wow, I like your interpretation and image shared. The view outside the car window. Would have never thought of those little words that we read on our side view mirrors as inspiration. Agree, this is has an almost eerie, haunting feel to it. Nicely unique.

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  8. Am familiar with those looming storm clouds, but learning about the poetry form..nice one!

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  9. storm and shadows, torrents of sorrow. well done

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  10. Love the play on objects are closer than they appear.

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  11. A car window and a mirror - very well done take on the prompt, and very clever too! I like this. You've inspired me - we may need to visit review mirrors one day! :-)

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  12. Excellent piece...I could feel the sense of foreboding...great write!

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  13. Definitely a Poe feel to this one, and you caught me by surprise with the picture. Excellent write!

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